Here we go again! The second free resume critique is posted below. Remember, resume writing is subjective and is an art as much as a science, so you might have different recommendations for the job seeker. Feel free to post your feedback in the Comments section — all opinions are welcome!


ResumePower Resume Critique #2
Format and Content Recommendations:
1. Change your resume from a functional style to a combination style. Combination resumes list employment history in reverse chronological order, and lead with a qualifications summary highlighting your strongest skills. Combination resumes work well for the majority of job seekers. Functional resumes (also called “skills resumes”) are the least-preferred format, and are often used by people trying to hide something (such as employment gaps or job-hopping). You could be sending red flags before your resume is even read (if it gets that far).
2. Add a headline. This replaces the objective in your current resume, and goes directly below your name and contact information. Although objectives can be useful for recent graduates or career changers, professionals on an established career path are better served by using a headline, tagline, and qualifications summary. The headline gives you a way to quickly communicate your career goal and qualifications. Try something like, “Experienced Administrative Support Professional.”
3. Add a tagline directly below your title. You can use this to sum up your breadth of experience.
Here’s how your headline and tagline might look:
EXPERIENCED ADMINISTRATIVE SUPPORT PROFESSIONAL
Offering expertise in MS Office and versatile skills that include executive support, bookkeeping, accounting, purchasing, and customer relations
4. Add a qualifications summary. This section goes below the headline and tagline, and can be written as a few bulleted statements or as a brief paragraph. Summarize the key strengths and value you bring to the table.
5. Add a key skills section. Most commonly written as a bulleted list in a two- or three-column format, this section helps maximize keyword density in your resume. Here are a few examples of keywords that you might want to include in your skills section:
- Front Desk/Office Management
- Bookkeeping & Accounting
- Spreadsheet Creation
- Database Administration
- Executive Calendaring
- Meeting & Event Planning
- Records Management
- Data Entry (75+ WPM)
- Purchasing/Inventory Management
- Reports/Presentations/Proposals
6. Create a professional experience section.
This is the “meat and potatoes” of your resume, and it should include your employer names and locations, your job titles, and employment dates, followed by a brief description of your responsibilities. Create a bulleted list of “Key Accomplishments” for your most recent jobs (going back ten years or so). You can briefly summarize your earlier experience in an “Early Career” section to save space.
Use some of the content from your current “Job Skills” section to describe your daily responsibilities. For your “Key Accomplishments,” incorporate content from your “Special Achievements” section, and then expand this so that you have several “Key Accomplishments” bullets for each job.
Your accomplishments should include examples of results, outcomes, and benefits you have delivered. Try to quantify your accomplishments with numbers, percentages, dollar amounts, or before/after comparisons to add credibility to your claims. You did this in the fist “special achievement” that you list on your current resume.
To avoid the appearance of job-hopping, group your temporary assignments together.
7. Omit references to time periods when you were seeking work. You are drawing unnecessary attention to the employment gaps. Downplay gaps in your work history by listing your years of employment (vs. listing months and years).
8. Keep your “Technical Skills” section, but move it below education.
9. Include the year you earned your AAS degree.
Design Recommendations:
1. Your resume would benefit from a redesign to give it a more polished, professional appearance. Peruse resume samples online or books to get some ideas.
2. Add space between each of the jobs you have held. This makes your document more reader-friendly by avoiding a “cluttered” look.
3. Be consistent with font usage. Your resume is mostly Times New Roman font, but you have a line of Arial in the address section.
Language Mechanics Recommendations:
1. Proofread your resume. You have some capitalization, punctuation (e.g., misplaced commas), and grammatical errors in your document, and your resume should be 100% error-free. For example, job titles should not be capitalized unless they are part of a standalone heading.
2. Correct inconsistencies. For example, sometimes you write out the word “manager,” and other times you abbreviate it (”Mgr”). In your Technical Skills section, you write “MS Word” and “MS Works,” “Microsoft E-mail,” and “Excel.” All of these are Microsoft applications, so you need to be consistent in how you are referencing this (either “MS” or “Microsoft” throughout). Administrative support professionals are valued for their attention to detail, so your efforts will pay off and be noticed by hiring managers.
Best wishes,
Kim Isaacs